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my last birth day i had a party but since my birthday is the day after halloween i decided to make it a costume party. I invited many of my friends and many of them went. the day of my party i had to wake up early to help my mom cook and then decorate. after we were done with all the food preparation and the decorating i had to start to get ready before all my friends got there. At the time that my friends got there i was ready to start the party. the party was  great i had lots of fun and saw many of my friends. At the end i had to help out clean.

per4pilot #8

i thought that it was really good and unique. the format had some mistakes and i found some places in the begining that they put the same thing twice but they can fix that.  i think that the characters could be more unique, for example the main character is like the tipical new girl in school.

per.4 #6 pilot critique

As i was reading i kinda didn't understand what was happening because it was going from one place to the other. the romance of a senior girl and a freshmen guy is awkward because it is rare to see that but they have to make the characters more unique. the format is off in some places but that can be fixed fast. everything else besides that is fine.

groundhog Day Reflection

the no-lienear structure of this film was going back to the same day. and he was able to repeat/change what he did wrong.

groundhog day compared to memento is very different because in memento the story is going backwords and in groundhog the movie is just repeating the same day over and over aging. Im gessing that they kept repeating until he relized that being a good guy is not bad at all and that he shouldn't always think of himself all the time.

per4. pilot #4

i like the story how it goes because it is unique the kind of language is used, i liked  how it its unique in a way that it can show high school kids act in a way that they don't think about the actions untill there are consequenses. the characters they are not that unique they should try to make them more unique. the structure of the story is not perfect they need to improve it.

per4 pilot #3

the structure is really good. the story is good but i think they should try to change something in the story plot because there is a movie that is kinda like this one.."seventeen again"but everything else is good.

per.4 pilot #2

the fomat needs adjustment. the story is a kind of story that as it goes on its going to get boing.

PER.4 PILOT #1

It is unique the characters all talk different. i really like the situation

Psycho Reflection

What can you learn from the screenplay of Psycho? its kinda simple to understand but at the same time you cant understand it.
What is creative about the story structure?the story structure is unique it lets the viewer have suspence and wonder of who is the killer and what is going to happened.
 How unique are the characters?  they are very unique because they all talk their own ways and they have a michiviouse personality.
How does the writer use humor and symbolism in his writing?they use symbols to identify characters for example they birds the guy has on his was they symbolize they name of the girl.

critique #2

Format 2

Unique/Interesting Characters 1 

Entertaining story/conflict 2 

Comments: What suggestions do you have for improvement?

this story is like every other story that is about high school students. thy should try to be more unique and the characters with different personalities. try to create a conflict that might get all the friends involved to create something different.

Pilot Critique #1

it is interesting but it needs to add more on the conversation of the mother and daughter to tell that the daughter doesn't like to listen to the mother.
conflict:1
format: 2
interesting unique: 2